In my proposal paper i feel like i need to work on my thesis and clear it up.
My concern is that i didnt have enough time i was rushing to finish my paper.
I feel that the last few paragraphs are not well defined and need more work.
I feel like i need to expand on my paper and lengthen it.
Tuesday, November 29, 2011
Tuesday, November 15, 2011
Planning essay 4
Looking back to essay 3 and planning to write essay 4 i think there are a good number of perspectives.
you have the people who are for it 100 %, those who oppose it, those who back the topic but think there need to be more regulation, and the undecided group.
My Solution.
In my perspective i believe that the solution to this problem would be to keep the guns as most Americans want but also strengthen the regulations that have been put on the guns themselves. The Government passed the right to carry law and from this law we as Americans have the right to own a gun. even though the government cant remove guns from the American people they can put heavier regulations on the guns that would prevent guns flooding the streets of our nation and low crime rates.
in writing your policy paper you would take the stand that you choose support. In the process i would choose the stand which backs the topic but also thinks there needs to be more regulations.
I believe that i have enough research for this stand on the topic. to me this was the easiest stand to find information on and it was also the stand that i support. i think i have enough research for write my paper but i also think gathering more research wouldn't be a bad thing to do.
you have the people who are for it 100 %, those who oppose it, those who back the topic but think there need to be more regulation, and the undecided group.
My Solution.
In my perspective i believe that the solution to this problem would be to keep the guns as most Americans want but also strengthen the regulations that have been put on the guns themselves. The Government passed the right to carry law and from this law we as Americans have the right to own a gun. even though the government cant remove guns from the American people they can put heavier regulations on the guns that would prevent guns flooding the streets of our nation and low crime rates.
in writing your policy paper you would take the stand that you choose support. In the process i would choose the stand which backs the topic but also thinks there needs to be more regulations.
I believe that i have enough research for this stand on the topic. to me this was the easiest stand to find information on and it was also the stand that i support. i think i have enough research for write my paper but i also think gathering more research wouldn't be a bad thing to do.
From Exploratory to Policy/Proposal
From getting the opportunity to correct my paper i chose to set back for a day clear my mind and then reread my paper and clean it up a little. I decided to add more research to my paper and fine tune the information that i already had. From doing this process i lengthened my paper at the same time strengthened it.
Yes after looking at my peer review i went back in and decided to make a few changes and tweaks. this process helped clear my paper up and it made it easier to read a smooth flowing paper. I found that the research in my paper was the strongest element and how it tied into the argument i was trying to get to the reader.
My biggest concern is the depth that my paper has after getting started on the research the first few things i found we relatively easy to find and then it became hard to find topics and works to choose from.
Yes after looking at my peer review i went back in and decided to make a few changes and tweaks. this process helped clear my paper up and it made it easier to read a smooth flowing paper. I found that the research in my paper was the strongest element and how it tied into the argument i was trying to get to the reader.
My biggest concern is the depth that my paper has after getting started on the research the first few things i found we relatively easy to find and then it became hard to find topics and works to choose from.
Monday, November 7, 2011
Annotative Bibliography
Andrew Hall
English 102-028
November 7, 2011
Annotative Bibliography
Firearms: Threat to the People?
Carlson, Kierstan Lee. Fighting firearms with Fire in the OAS: A Critical Evaluation of the Inter-American Convention Against the Manufacturing of and Trafficking in Firearms, Ammunition, and Other Related Materials. American University International Law Review. 2010. Web. November 2, 2011.
In this article it explains the importance of bringing the trafficking of illegal weapons to a halt. Carlson tells the reader that there is a legitimate market for the small arms and light weapons. But there are also extreme amounts of trafficking happening in the background on the black and grey markets. And from this ease of access to these arms it is becoming a danger to the people on our streets of our towns. Carlson also tells us what has become of countries in Latin American and how the trafficking of arms had affected these regions.
Lott, John R. Jr.. Does Allowing law-Abiding Citizens To Cary Concealed Handguns Save Lives?. Chicago, Il. University of Chicago Law School. 1997. Web. November 2, 2011.
In Lott’s essay he states they “The solution is clear: more regulations or even the complete eliminations of guns.” In my perspective I believe that the complete elimination of guns would be going a bit far but I would strongly encourage the strengthening of the regulations and the laws behind owning a gun. He tells us that if guns are placed into an environment that would be more prone to out rages of anger there is a higher chance of someone dying in the situation. He also gives the facts of how owners protect themselves from being attacked using guns between 700,000 and 3.5 million times each year. I believe that if you have the right training and know how skills of operating a gun that it is perfectly legal to own a gun.
Phillips, J.; Barnes, T.; Fusselman, R.; Haskell, Z.; Ganschow B. . An Individual’s Right to Poses a Firearm. Idaho. Brigham Young University. 2009. Print.
This essay is being pushed to give the owner of a gun the knowledge of what right s he or she has and how they have the right to own a gun. These rights are extremely important because it comes from the Second Amendment of the Bill of Rights of the United States. Each individual has the opportunity to interpret the amendment as they choose and have the right to own a gun but in having that right they should have the knowledge how to use it and operate the weapon. This essay tells us how the people have every right to own a gun and the government can’t take that from them but they do posses the power to stricken and set regulations that the people must abide by.
Kates, Don B.; Mauser, Gary A. . Would Banning Firearms Reduce Murder and Suicide? A review of International Evidence. Bepress Legal Series. 2006. Print.
In the “Would Banning Firearms Reduce Murder and Suicide? A review of International Evidence” essay they talk about the relation that a firearm being widely available to the public has any affect of the rates of murder, suicide and violence itself. On one had a person would say yes 80% of the crimes and 90% of the murders are caused my guns but are they; the saying guns don’t kill people, people kill people comes into play here as the study showed that guns aren’t the cause of the crimes, murders and violence it is the social issues and economical factors that play the major role in crimes. The is an important study because it give the officials of our government the knowledge that putting stricter demands of the regulations of gun ownership is a strongly encouraged thing and would be a better thing the long run.
Dahlberg, Linda; Ikeda, Robin; Krensnow, Marcie-jo. Guns in the Home and Risk of a Violent Death in the Home: Findings from a National Study. Baltimore, MD. Johs Hopkins Bloomsburg School of Public Health. 2004. Print.
In a national study brought forth by Dahlberg, Ikeda, and Krensnow in 2004 they found that having a forearm in the home puts the person at a greater risk of dying from a homicide. It also brings in the conclusion of one dying form suicide and the percent was greater in homes that had guns from those homes that didn’t have guns. But all together they found that having a firearm in the home greatly raised the percent of a homicide or suicide occurring in a family.
Dezhbakhsh, H.; Rubin,P.. Lives Saved or Lives Lost? The Effect of Concealed-Handgun Law on Crime. American Economic Association. May, 1998. Print
In this article they state both side of the situation and tell us that increasing the ownership of guns may lead to the increase of crime in our nation but then we see the other side of the situation where is the ownership of guns is broader, then the potential owners of the guns may be some of the future victims and they may be able to protect themselves in a case of need. They come to the agreement that if the criminal has the knowledge that any victim that they choose to victimize may be armed then the crime rate will decrease in theory and this still give the human the right-to-carry.
Plassmann, Florenz; Whitley, John. Confirming “More Guns, Less Crime”. Stanford Law Review. 2003 Web. November 7,2011
In the compliment of data from 1977 to 2000 on a county level for the entire US Plassmann and Whitley found that since the right-to-carry law the crime rate has reduced each year at a steady rate. In looking back on their work we come to realize that there demonstration of looking at crime rate versus the right-to-carry law was true to the specifics until 1997. From here the rates were skewed and misleading as their models predictions were extremely off.
Polsby, Daniel. Firearms Cost, Firearms Benefits and The Limits of Knowledge. Northwestern University of Law. The journal of criminal law. Vol. 86, No. 1. 1996. Print
In Polsby’s article Firearms Cost, Firearms Benefits and The Limits of Knowledge, he tells us that even though the crime rates in the United States have been dropping constantly over the past twenty years people today are still concerned. He tells us that the crime rates today are well below the rate of that in the late 70’s and even below that of most of the 20’s. but the discussion keeps coming back up and people are still worried about the crime rates and Polsby looked into the rates of crime being taken place he understands and sheds some light on the situation he splits the rates up into two things the quantity and the quality of crimes. Even though the quantity of the crimes has continued to go down each year there are still big and horrible crimes being taken place? From people being able to carry firearms it has dropped the gun victims but there will always be other crimes taking place in the world that involve guns where no one gets hurt and the gun is never fired but it’s the power that the gun has and why it is a weapon that can cause life or death it can change the outcome of any crime if it is fired but the fact that guns cause crimes isn’t true it’s more of how they are used in those crimes.
Cotton, p.. Gun-Associated Violence Increasingly Viewed as Public Health Challenge. JAMA Vol: 267 Issue :9. 1992. Print
Cotton tells us that the guns that are in the home are more times than often used against fellow home members that against intruders and with the promotion of these guns there should also be the promotion of the safety of storage. If a homeowner is going to have a gun then the homeowner should also have a devise to store the weapon in and be securely lock from just a pad lock to a electronic lock, this would insure that the gun doesn’t get stolen or used in the wrong manor.
Wednesday, November 2, 2011
SWA#23
Exploratory Essay
A. Does playing more than one sport help or hinder children's athleticism?
Over the years i have hear this topic thrown around and 50% of the time i heard that it was good to play more than one sport and 50% of the time i heard it would hinder the kids abilities. i feel that researching and getting a better understanding of this would be intriguing to an audience of the present day parents and to the future parents.
D. i feel right at home on this topic growing up my dad pretty much kept me focused on baseball and baseball only. I think that it helped me more than hindered me in my athletic ability. there are some draw backs in not being able to play more sports at the same time but it personally didn't bother me that much. my perspective on the situation is kind of different from how i was raised, shockingly, i feel that you should let your child play all the sports possible at a younger age and by the time he or she is nearing their teen years focus towards one particular sport and strive to excel in that particular sport. so in the initial response i believe it is true 50/50 but its more of the have a diverse range of sports at a younger age and the at the teens focus it towards one sport and fine tune your skills.
A. Does playing more than one sport help or hinder children's athleticism?
Over the years i have hear this topic thrown around and 50% of the time i heard that it was good to play more than one sport and 50% of the time i heard it would hinder the kids abilities. i feel that researching and getting a better understanding of this would be intriguing to an audience of the present day parents and to the future parents.
D. i feel right at home on this topic growing up my dad pretty much kept me focused on baseball and baseball only. I think that it helped me more than hindered me in my athletic ability. there are some draw backs in not being able to play more sports at the same time but it personally didn't bother me that much. my perspective on the situation is kind of different from how i was raised, shockingly, i feel that you should let your child play all the sports possible at a younger age and by the time he or she is nearing their teen years focus towards one particular sport and strive to excel in that particular sport. so in the initial response i believe it is true 50/50 but its more of the have a diverse range of sports at a younger age and the at the teens focus it towards one sport and fine tune your skills.
Annotative Bibliography 1-4
1. Carlson, Kierstan Lee. Fighting firearms with Fire in the OAS: A Critical Evaluation of the Inter-American Convention Against the Manufacturing of and Trafficking in Firearms, Ammunition, and Other Related Materials. American University International Law Review. 2010. Web. November 2, 2011.
In this article it explains the importance of bringing the trafficking of illegal weapons to a halt. Carlson tells the reader that there is a legitimate market for the small arms and light weapons. But there are also extreme amounts of trafficking happening in the background on the black and grey markets. And from this ease of access to these arms it is becoming a danger to the people on our streets of our towns. Carlson also tells us what has become of countries in Latin American and how the trafficking of arms had affected these regions.
2. Lott, John R. Jr.. Does Allowing law-Abiding Citizens To Cary Concealed Handguns Save Lives?. Chicago, Il. University of Chicago Law School. 1997. Web. November 2, 2011.
In Lott’s essay he states they “The solution is clear: more regulations or even the complete eliminations of guns.” In my perspective I believe that the complete elimination of guns would be going a bit far but I would strongly encourage the strengthening of the regulations and the laws behind owning a gun. He tells us that if guns are placed into an environment that would be more prone to out rages of anger there is a higher chance of someone dying in the situation. He also gives the facts of how owners protect themselves from being attacked using guns between 700,000 and 3.5 million times each year. I believe that if you have the right training and know how skills of operating a gun that it is perfectly legal to own a gun.
3. Phillips, J.; Barnes, T.; Fusselman, R.; Haskell, Z.; Ganschow B. . An Individual’s Right to Poses a Firearm. Idaho. Brigham Young University. 2009. Print.
This essay is being pushed to give the owner of a gun the knowledge of what right s he or she has and how they have the right to own a gun. These rights are extremely important because it comes from the Second Amendment of the Bill of Rights of the United States. Each individual has the opportunity to interpret the amendment as they choose and have the right to own a gun but in having that right they should have the knowledge how to use it and operate the weapon. This essay tells us how the people have every right to own a gun and the government can’t take that from them but they do posses the power to stricken and set regulations that the people must abide by.
4. Kates, Don B.; Mauser, Gary A. . Would Banning Firearms Reduce Murder and Suicide? A review of International Evidence. Bepress Legal Series. 2006. Print.
In the “Would Banning Firearms Reduce Murder and Suicide? A review of International Evidence” essay they talk about the relation that a firearm being widely available to the public has any affect of the rates of murder, suicide and violence itself. On one had a person would say yes 80% of the crimes and 90% of the murders are caused my guns but are they; the saying guns don’t kill people, people kill people comes into play here as the study showed that guns aren’t the cause of the crimes, murders and violence it is the social issues and economical factors that play the major role in crimes. The is an important study because it give the officials of our government the knowledge that putting stricter demands of the regulations of gun ownership is a strongly encouraged thing and would be a better thing the long run.
Wednesday, October 26, 2011
SWA #19
1. he tells us that there are a 3 set parameters that defines a sport.
it must use a large motor skill
it must have an objective scoring system
it must use nothing more complicated than a simple machine, such as a baseball bat or a vault pole.
2. It would be important to have a set guidline for the naming an activity a sport. It should have a list of criteria and it wil have to meet a sertain percent of the total criteria to be considered and deemed a sport.
baseball is a widely known sport because it involves two teams battling for the victory, it involves skill and endurance. but at the same time when people look at chess they dont exactly see a sport but when you think about it chess is two people challenging one another for the win and it involves strategy and like all soprts it involves practice.
it must use a large motor skill
it must have an objective scoring system
it must use nothing more complicated than a simple machine, such as a baseball bat or a vault pole.
2. It would be important to have a set guidline for the naming an activity a sport. It should have a list of criteria and it wil have to meet a sertain percent of the total criteria to be considered and deemed a sport.
baseball is a widely known sport because it involves two teams battling for the victory, it involves skill and endurance. but at the same time when people look at chess they dont exactly see a sport but when you think about it chess is two people challenging one another for the win and it involves strategy and like all soprts it involves practice.
SWA #18
I decided to lok us a few different things.
Issue of hunting illegally in SC
The issue of the global debt
issue of the constant tax raise in our state and nation wide.
I found it easier to research the issue on illegal hunting mainly because i was more interested in the topic. recently we had a poacher on our land and he was caught by the game warden. i feel that it is an issue not nonly state wide but also nation wide. where ever there is animals to hunt there will always be someone trying to bend the rules and get a better chance at taking an animal.
Issue of hunting illegally in SC
The issue of the global debt
issue of the constant tax raise in our state and nation wide.
I found it easier to research the issue on illegal hunting mainly because i was more interested in the topic. recently we had a poacher on our land and he was caught by the game warden. i feel that it is an issue not nonly state wide but also nation wide. where ever there is animals to hunt there will always be someone trying to bend the rules and get a better chance at taking an animal.
Sunday, October 16, 2011
Monday, October 10, 2011
Outline for paper 2
Working Title: Time Travels
Intro/Thesis: Today we live in a visual dominated culture. Advertisements utilize techniques involved with visual communication. When comparing two printed advertisements it is important to understand the way the images work on their own and team up with written text to create an argument intended to influence a specific audience. In comparing these two advertisements the realization of how and what ways watches are being directed towards is fascinating. As for who the intended audience, these watches are directed differently one to the older sophisticated man and one to the younger sportier person but at the same time advertising the same item.
Outline:
I. The audiences that the advertisement pieces are aiming towards.
a. The first piece of advertisement is being portrayed to the older and more successful audience.
b. In the second advertisement it is communicating its message to the younger and more athletic type of audience. It is also being directed to the more rugged audience.
II. The type of fonts and the color choice in the text on the advertisement.
a. The first advertisement the font type and color is a clean and strong sounding. The color of the text is white and stands out against the background.
b. The second advertisement has a cool and new look to it the font is a very legible text and stands out mainly because it is electric blue against a black background.
III. The slogan of the advertisements both display what and who the items are being portrayed towards.
a. The first piece gives the slogan “THE GREAT ONE” to me this slogan is very strong and gives its statement very well. It tells you who the intended audience is, the higher end audience.
b. The second piece’s slogan is “DESIGNED TO TEST LIMITS” stating that these items can withstand anything. It’s durable and reliable and you can put your trust in this item.
IV. How the logos send a message to their intended audience.
a. The first advertisement piece’s logo ties in extremely well with the background. In the logo it has the symbolism having plane wings and an anchor along with a B for Breitling.
b. The second advertisement is just a plan and simple look it does not have anything that sticks out
V. The Background of the items and how it correlates to the audience.
a. In the first item the background is a plane and on a lake with trees and a clean, wealthy, educated, distinguished but yet rugged looking man.
b. The second item has a male athlete playing soccer in the background and he look as if he is moving so fast the his image is being distorted through time. It is sporting a young athletic and determined sports enthusiast.
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